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You laid in vein,
While I laid alone.
You put me out,
When I should have glown.
We ate in the jungle,
Said good-bye on my lawn.
You were with me at dusk,
And I was gone before dawn.
You made it hard not to miss you,
You made it hard to let it go,
It was sometime before I realized;
Better I should know.
All the messages you left me,
All the letters I never read,
Were full of things,
That are better left unsaid.
All the fighting that
I thought I'd done,
Had been done for nothing,
And nothing was won.
Now, you make it harder to love you,
But I can't stay away,
And it's hard when you mean,
The opposite of what you say.
The one thing I showed you,
The one thing you've learned,
Was to teach me,
That I'll always get burned.
©2007-2009 ~NorcodicFreak
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If you could only see, you'd understand what you've done to me. Be naive, and turn your back, you're not going to like what happens next...

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I love your use of opposites and the imagery of:

We ate in the jungle,
Said good-bye on my lawn.
You were with me at dusk,
And I was gone before dawn.

Also interesting images and ideas coming from your choice of spelling of 'vein'
This flows really well and was lovely to read.

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:heart: it's hard to walk this path alone, hard to know which way to go :heart:

~Alter bridge, Open Your Eyes
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Thank you =) I'm really glad you like it!

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Freedom Is The Kiss.

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